You can change the justified stuff... somehow. I saw it somewhere. If I come across it somewhere again, I'll pass it your way.

Poem... deep. I'll need to read it again.

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My boy, if silence is golden, you are bankrupt. -
Charlie Chan

I think I enjoyed this piece because the form seemed interesting. Although, as I read it, I feel like I'm almost understanding it, but missing something integral...some underlying element.

the small notations to the right are the fisherman's comments
the left justifieds are the fish's comments (I enjoy these the most because of the fun sarcasm "thanks for..." etc lol )
The meat of the poem is the narative stanzas that describe the action. They're interesting, but seem a bit off-puting and awkward with the slashes, colons, etc. You were consistent throughout, so the piece works symmetrically, but the pace seems abrasive. Did you do this on purpose to shake up the reader in an attempt to evoke a jarring experienc...as the fish might've felt during this ordeal?

I wish I could put my finger on it, but I do like this piece. I'll be watching you.

when you read it, you make a choice in how you read it. you can read line break to line break. or you can read it slash mark to slash mark. similar choices in reading can be made with punctuation. for instance, depending on how you look at it syntactically, the slash marks can double as periods, but not all at the same time. it's a form I've been working on for a long time. strange thing is that random readers seem to get the versitility they give the reader in what reading they get out of it. poets, apparently, do not. I don't understand why, but it's something I'd like to remedy at some point.

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Reality is a sound, you have to tune into it not just keep yelling.
~Anne Carson

Your a very talented writer.

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I sent him to the country and I fed him on gingerbread
Along came a choo choo, knocked my monkey coo-coo
And now my monkey\\\'s dead
The primate\\\'s scream of consonance is a reflection
Of his own mind\\\'s dissonance