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Learning to breathe by ~panika:iconpanika:

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Tried to pull you underЦ
be your breath
but got lost in the waves,
beached on glacial shores.

Muddied hands with silt
and painted the names
of those who have run
palms down belly softly
across my abdomen.

You got lost in constellations
and psychodynamic theory;
blinded by the sunlight
when you were just close
enough to touch it.

I renamed you once more
for good measure.

We do this in knots,
count the tension marks up my back.
Proof of earthquake activity.

My pulse shakes
as this building breaks
and you will take me out of myself for the sake of being able
to find yourself as change
forgotten in my pocket bottoms.

Turning my head
when you hit the side walk,
smash the glassЦ embedded.

In your step I lost faith,
like everything elseЦ underwater.

My tank cracked
the fish flailing from my cupped
left hand, cradled next to my chest.

I could save one if only
to be alright tomorrow,
awake the next morning.
Things seem to fall away like that.

You found me naked and scaled,
floating in your bed.
No sense of movement
in your lips on mine.

Blue and purpled kisscoldtouch.

We are silent like blindness.

I am lost like breath.
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Author's Comments

You walked on water
and I raced up to touch your feet.

Tried to pull you underЦ
be your breath
but got lost in the waves,
beached on glacial shores.

Muddied hands with silt
and painted the names
of those who have run
palms down belly softly
across my abdomen.

You got lost in constellations
and psychodynamic theory;
blinded by the sunlight
when you were just close
enough to touch it.

I renamed you once more
for good measure.

We do this in knots,
count the tension marks up my back.
Proof of earthquake activity.

My pulse shakes
as this building breaks
and you will take me out of myself
for the sake of being able
to find yourself as change
forgotten in my pocket bottoms.

Turning my head
when you hit the side walk,
smash the glassЦ embedded.

In your step I lost faith,
like everything elseЦ underwater.

My tank cracked
the fish flailing from my cupped
left hand, cradled next to my chest.

I could save one if only
to be alright tomorrow,
awake the next morning.
Things seem to fall away like that.

You found me naked and scaled,
floating in your bed.
No sense of movement
in your lips on mine.

Blue and purpled kisscoldtouch.

We are silent like blindness.

I am lost like breath.

Daily Deviation

Given 2002-12-08

You walked on water | and I raced up to touch your feet. panika begins her poem with these words, then in her lovely writing style moves into telling a story in Learning to breathe. A work that's wonderful and complete, and worth reading over and over.. ( chosen by +skyorange )
(Selected by ^faithwalker) (Featured by `faithwalker)

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~fatelessmirror Nov 21, 2002, 5:39:46 PM

O! The relation. I ripped my heart out again when I read this. Those times with her...

:iconsyragon:
`syragon Nov 21, 2002, 5:40:24 PM
wow. +favlove

awesome grasp on words and emotion in this

--
fear no evil...
:iconinvictus-muse:
~invictus-muse Nov 21, 2002, 5:44:34 PM
Those last three lines are a great summing up to such a really, really good poem Love
:iconfathernye:
~fathernye Nov 21, 2002, 8:22:10 PM
Very somber. This has some very interesting levels as you peel it back.

-JD-

--
The essence of living is to continually dissolve into the space and time in which we happen to be. Therefore, we should face reality instead of fooling ourselves in daydreams.

Tsai Chih

Homepage: The Lan
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~terov Nov 21, 2002, 10:52:37 PM
Positively impressed. Feels kind of transcendentalist, a sort of transference between objects of a similar spiritual nature. This poem is a journey, and that's something that all poets should strive for.

--
Seek and ye shall find.
:iconlzrelak:
~lzrelak Dec 6, 2002, 6:16:46 PM
Just amazing....very well written...amazing.
:iconmnemosa:
~mnemosa Dec 6, 2002, 6:28:22 PM
that..brought tears to my eyes, and i'm serious. It was terribly awesomely beautiful, and for once someone pulled a string attatched to my heart. In a sense i'm afraid, but because it touches me so deeply all i feel is..

..nothing...
:iconthewretchd:
~thewretchd Dec 6, 2002, 6:42:40 PM
Interesting....

I'm so glad to see some writing get DD.
:iconsouf-up:
~souf-up Dec 6, 2002, 6:51:32 PM
Beyond.

--
Where I am, Welcome to it.
:iconalptraum:
~alptraum Dec 6, 2002, 7:07:11 PM
well, this is one of few writings that left my mouth wide open in awe. +fav.

--
"Communism may be messy, but it sure is tasty."

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